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Setting Sail
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For any discussions you may want to make on my episode.
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Locke Falls
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How random! :P A barbecue, where did that come from?
![]() Also I think it's Widmore rather than Wigmore and Paik rather than Palik. For a minute I thought that this all might be a flashforward and they were away from the island celebrating a reunion with a barbecue or something ![]() Interesting revelation that Widmore seemingly brought Sun and Jin to the island, very interesting indeed...
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Flashing Desmond
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Yeah very good for a first attempt Fergie
![]() The only thing is, as Wiz pointed out, it's Widmore not Wigmore, and Paik not Palik Apart from that it's great ![]()
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Light em Uup!
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"Lets have a Barbeque!" classic. :P
Hmm... why didn't Desmond recognize the name Widmore? And the flashback kind of gives new meaning to the last one. I'll say more later.
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Setting Sail
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Hello Again :)
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Interesting..
Good first attempt Fergie. Nice Sun/Paik/Widmore connection, some good background linkage there. I am a little confused over why they're having a BBQ when rescue is supposed to be coming? Will add more later.
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Locke 1, Jack -1000000000
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Yeah that was good for your first time Fergie
![]() Maybe the rescue is coming - it's just a bit delayed - and they're all having a BBQ in celebration and anticipation of it. But perhaps they shouldn't be so over-confident...
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Lord of the Flies
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I really like this season, because of the Sun/Jin revalations of "A Baby Will Change Everything"! Grr, now I cant do one of their flashbacks!
But its flowing really well, great job! I didnt find the barby that "random", perhaps just the way it was phrased! ![]()
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Light em Uup!
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I don't mind the BBQ... but I do think it would be something that Hurley would suggest... and Jack possibly going along with.
But its all good. ![]()
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Making Taco's for Kate
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well of course hurley would suggest it, it's food god dammit!
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Hello Again :)
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I admit, im not sure about the BBQ thing - i don't think the situation was that relaxed
![]() But it's a good piece of work Fergz - it has nice flow to it and reminded me a little but of 'Trish Tanaka..' - it had that vibe to it. As i said it was good to see the linkage between Sun/Paik/Widmore, that was a nice touch. It was a nice episode which zipped along and was easy to read. Good work, it can't be easy stepping into the ring of public writing, but you did it and good on you for helping to shape this story, much appreciated ![]()
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