That's really good fbf! I would even say that you improved on the first chapter; it all seems very real and vivd, and it would be good to see you carry on with this.
I haven't written first person for ages - and not once for a piece of Lost writing - but I wouldn't mind trying, even though I don't know how it would turn out and that I still can't write OCs very well at all. So I might just try with an existing character or something... but yeah, nice work
